Blog #13

I chose to read chapter five of They Say/I Say, “And Yet”: Distinguishing What You Say from What They Say. I wanted to read this chapter because, in my last essay, I lost points due to the fact that my voice wasn’t entirely present in my essay. I want to make sure that for our current essay, I am putting my voice into the paper and getting my views across. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this chapter as it had a multitude of useful information that really helped me to see where I could improve my writing. They displayed multiple different techniques to use when trying to put your voice into a conversation. 

Before Revision:

The brain is the most amazing and complex organ of our body, and we are using it 24/7, but there are definitely ways we could be further expanding its capacities and creating more of a balance. While we are mostly encouraged to use our brain for critical thinking, we should begin to use it for creative thinking as well as it could further humans as a society. Songwriter and Grammy Award winner Yo Yo Ma writes in “Necessary Edges: Arts, Empathy, and Education,” about his aspect on the importance of integrating the arts with the sciences, as he believes it is imperative for our minds and for humanity. Ma talks of how we need the balance between the arts and the sciences to create the equilibrium we need in order to survive. He writes, “Only when the science and the arts are linked to the mainstream will we find a sustainable balance in society.” Here, Ma accurately points out the fact that we maybe need to reevaluate how we are currently using our brains. If we can integrate the arts into how we currently use our brains for critical thinking, we could unlock a whole new potential to the brain which could lead to the further balance of ourselves as humans. While yes, it may not be an instantaneous process, if we can at least start introducing the idea of using our brains in different ways we could start to unlock a whole new aspect of the mind.

After Revision:

The brain is the most amazing and complex organ of our body, and we are using it 24/7, but there are definitely ways we could be further expanding its capacities and creating more of a balance. In the profession of nursing, you are mostly encouraged to use your brain for critical and logical thinking, but we should begin to think about using it for creative thinking as well. Having the balance between the logical and the creative could help further individuals capabilities in the nursing profession and lead to new methods and ways of thinking. Cellist and Grammy Award winner Yo Yo Ma writes in “Necessary Edges: Arts, Empathy, and Education,” about his aspect on the importance of integrating the arts with the sciences, as he believes it is imperative for our minds and for humanity. Ma talks of how we need the balance between the arts and the sciences to create the equilibrium we need in order to survive. He writes, “Only when the science and the arts are linked to the mainstream will we find a sustainable balance in society.” Here it is accurately pointed out that we maybe need to reevaluate how we are currently using our brains. If nurses are able to integrate the arts into how they currently use their brains for critical and logical thinking, they could end up unlocking a whole new potential to the brain which could lead to that much-needed balance that they currently do not seem to be getting. While it may not be an instantaneous process, if we can at least start introducing the idea of nurses using their brains in different ways than just logically, they could start to unlock a whole new aspect to the profession that could eventually lead to new findings beyond what we may know now.